The pin pricks my skin, I feel nothing...
Fall of 2010 my best guy friend and I took our wheelers down to the Warren Pits. The pits are where everyone gathers on weekends to shoot guns and take their trucks through the mud. Him and I were the only ones that really messed with ATV's, no one else could either afford them, or just didn't have one. I unloaded mine first, I couldn't find my ramps that morning so I just found a hill to back up close to and unloaded that way. I was immediately so excited to get riding, it had been months.
As our other friends pulled up in their trucks, I saw a few other people around unloading their wheelers too, two of them were side by sides. I didn't know who they were though so I just waved and kept riding. I didn't always trust other riders in the pits because there are a lot of blind spots, people come out from no where. You just always have to be on the look out for other riders, I always think to myself that I trust me, but I don't trust them. I don't trust other riders to be as cautious as me, they all just want to show off. As I feel the mud cling to my skin, I head straight for another mud hole. I gave my 800cc wheeler some throttle and at the same moment, everything I saw in front of me was a blur, I was tossed from my wheeler as I felt a crushing blow to my left leg. Moments before I was driving, and now I'm lying on the cold hard dirt of the Warren Pits.
As my friends and people I didn't know were screaming, I could barley hear them, everything was so faint and I could barely make out the clouds above. I felt nothing, no pain. I was lifted up so I could sit and try and talk. I looked down to see blood coming from my pants. A pin could have pricked me and I wouldn't have felt it. I believe I was just in shock, as they let go of my back, I fell back to the ground and conked back out...
Nice approach to the prompt, backing into it like this! Week 10 asks you to find ways to distance the reader. This is pretty straightforward and non-distancing, but the last graf kind of goes in and out, just the way you were going in and out of consciousness--and that in-and-out effect is very week 10.
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